Reviews can be very revealing about the reader as
well as the book they review. Some readers want the sexy stuff right up front
while others prefer the story to build. Some want to see the hero in action on
the first page others want to understand what makes the hero ‘tick.’ I was
going to do some research on what readers want when Ann Siracusa’s blog popped
up on my screen. She looked at the issue from another perspective, Dear Author,
Please Don’t …
well as the book they review. Some readers want the sexy stuff right up front
while others prefer the story to build. Some want to see the hero in action on
the first page others want to understand what makes the hero ‘tick.’ I was
going to do some research on what readers want when Ann Siracusa’s blog popped
up on my screen. She looked at the issue from another perspective, Dear Author,
Please Don’t …
Ann came across a 62 page Amazon thread that
contained 1,500 comments. Actually, now it’s up to 69 pages of comments. Ann’s observed
that romance writers want ‘realistic fantasy.’ They want it look like real life
but with ‘fantasized situations and satisfying endings.’
contained 1,500 comments. Actually, now it’s up to 69 pages of comments. Ann’s observed
that romance writers want ‘realistic fantasy.’ They want it look like real life
but with ‘fantasized situations and satisfying endings.’
Ann selected some of the posts and organized them
into categories: Names, Characterizations, Love/Sex Scenes, Plot, Dialogue,
Writing Craft/GMC, and Technical Craft.
into categories: Names, Characterizations, Love/Sex Scenes, Plot, Dialogue,
Writing Craft/GMC, and Technical Craft.
Here is Ann’s full
post. She also includes a link to the original Amazon thread.
post. She also includes a link to the original Amazon thread.
What do want authors to stop doing? Which ones
listed resonate with you the most?
listed resonate with you the most?
Dear Author, Please Don’t … by R. Ann Siracusa
Not long ago, I happened
to run onto a reader’s comment thread on Amazon.com entitled “Dear
Author: Please Don’t…” at the following
Amazon link.
to run onto a reader’s comment thread on Amazon.com entitled “Dear
Author: Please Don’t…” at the following
Amazon link.
There are 62 pages of interesting reading. Over
1,500 comments from readers. I had to restrain myself from writing
responses. While some of them are a little [or a lot] off
the wall, many of the readers had something worthwhile to tell us. Many
of the don’ts we’ve heard from agents, editors, and other
authors.
1,500 comments from readers. I had to restrain myself from writing
responses. While some of them are a little [or a lot] off
the wall, many of the readers had something worthwhile to tell us. Many
of the don’ts we’ve heard from agents, editors, and other
authors.
As authors, we may not agree, but each comment
represents the personal reaction of a reader. To me, they speak
volumes about what people read and what is getting published by today’s
industry.
represents the personal reaction of a reader. To me, they speak
volumes about what people read and what is getting published by today’s
industry.
The posts gave me the impression that readers
[at least romance readers] want “realistic fantasy” in that they want the
setting and indicators of everyday real life but at the same time fantasized
situations and satisfying endings.
[at least romance readers] want “realistic fantasy” in that they want the
setting and indicators of everyday real life but at the same time fantasized
situations and satisfying endings.
To be sure, these comments come from different
people—some want one thing, others want another, and tastes vary—but I couldn’t
help comparing statements about not giving the hero (or heroine, for that
matter) a moustache or a smoking habit or restraining from giving heroines
green eyes, with other comments such as:
people—some want one thing, others want another, and tastes vary—but I couldn’t
help comparing statements about not giving the hero (or heroine, for that
matter) a moustache or a smoking habit or restraining from giving heroines
green eyes, with other comments such as:
● “Don’t
describe many bouts of love-making without at least once reaching
for a wash rag or the proverbial handkerchief”
describe many bouts of love-making without at least once reaching
for a wash rag or the proverbial handkerchief”
● “Don’t
have your main characters make love every night for months without referring to
that monthly challenge”
have your main characters make love every night for months without referring to
that monthly challenge”
A couple of my favorites, which I believe are
good advice, include:
good advice, include:
● “Don’t
allow your hero behave like a sociopath. If the hero is, in fact, a sociopath,
then the heroine should kill him and get on with her life.”
allow your hero behave like a sociopath. If the hero is, in fact, a sociopath,
then the heroine should kill him and get on with her life.”
● “Don’t
over dramatize the alpha male to the point where, if he was a real person, he
could be diagnosed as clinically insane.”
over dramatize the alpha male to the point where, if he was a real person, he
could be diagnosed as clinically insane.”
Just to give you a sample, I’ve grouped the
comments into loose categories, although they don’t appear in this order in the
thread. I didn’t repeat any readers’ names, but these are quotes.
comments into loose categories, although they don’t appear in this order in the
thread. I didn’t repeat any readers’ names, but these are quotes.
Names: Dear Author, Please Don’t…
●
“…name your heroes Hunter, Connor, or [insert any other over-used name here] no
matter how much you like the name. If you must use an over-used name go with
classics like John, Sam or Robert. You guys are killing the ‘exotic’ names by
making them common!”
“…name your heroes Hunter, Connor, or [insert any other over-used name here] no
matter how much you like the name. If you must use an over-used name go with
classics like John, Sam or Robert. You guys are killing the ‘exotic’ names by
making them common!”
● “…give
your characters 20 different names (nicknames).”
your characters 20 different names (nicknames).”
●
“…name several characters with the same first initial in their name: Cindy and
Cissy or Tom and Todd. For goodness sakes, you’ve got the whole alphabet to
choose from.”
“…name several characters with the same first initial in their name: Cindy and
Cissy or Tom and Todd. For goodness sakes, you’ve got the whole alphabet to
choose from.”
●
“…give the heroine a name which could be mistaken for a male: Morgan, Joey or
Danny (Believe me, I’ve seen each of these!!)”
“…give the heroine a name which could be mistaken for a male: Morgan, Joey or
Danny (Believe me, I’ve seen each of these!!)”
●
“…give the hero or heroine names that are so unusual that the reader doesn’t
know how they’re pronounced. It’s very distracting when you’re trying to enjoy
the book and you don’t know how to “read” the name. At the very
least, have a character (the person him/herself, or a sibling, etc.)
demonstrate the pronunciation, even if it’s by correcting someone.”
“…give the hero or heroine names that are so unusual that the reader doesn’t
know how they’re pronounced. It’s very distracting when you’re trying to enjoy
the book and you don’t know how to “read” the name. At the very
least, have a character (the person him/herself, or a sibling, etc.)
demonstrate the pronunciation, even if it’s by correcting someone.”
Characterization: Dear Author, Please
Don’t…
Don’t…
●
“…forget about your secondary characters, even if you have limited space. Try
to have them all as real as possible; it takes away from the overall effect if
they’re all cardboard cutouts.” and “Please, flesh out your secondary
characters.”
“…forget about your secondary characters, even if you have limited space. Try
to have them all as real as possible; it takes away from the overall effect if
they’re all cardboard cutouts.” and “Please, flesh out your secondary
characters.”
●
“…make your villains one-dimensional. Since everyone has a reason to
do villainous things why not the ones in books?”
“…make your villains one-dimensional. Since everyone has a reason to
do villainous things why not the ones in books?”
●
“…base your characters (especially in a series) on yourself, your current
husband/lover or a close friend/family member. We can tell and it burns us; we
hate it…especially when you get divorced and turn the hero you make us love
in books 1-4 into a prick we are supposed to hate in books 5-7.”
“…base your characters (especially in a series) on yourself, your current
husband/lover or a close friend/family member. We can tell and it burns us; we
hate it…especially when you get divorced and turn the hero you make us love
in books 1-4 into a prick we are supposed to hate in books 5-7.”
●
“…let your heroine behave like an idiot and write it so that the hero finds
this stupidity cute, winning, charming or adorable. There’s a difference
between making an error and lacking any common sense.”
“…let your heroine behave like an idiot and write it so that the hero finds
this stupidity cute, winning, charming or adorable. There’s a difference
between making an error and lacking any common sense.”
● “…Don’t
forget that not all heroines have to be petite and blonde with huge breasts.”
forget that not all heroines have to be petite and blonde with huge breasts.”
● “…make
your heroine’s innocence unrealistic. Your heroine experiencing her
first kiss at age 25 is odd.” And “If you’re writing a twenty-five year old
college student, don’t make her act like a 60 year old matron who’s never seen
a guy naked.”
your heroine’s innocence unrealistic. Your heroine experiencing her
first kiss at age 25 is odd.” And “If you’re writing a twenty-five year old
college student, don’t make her act like a 60 year old matron who’s never seen
a guy naked.”
● “…have
your hero and heroine unite after several years apart where he was a slut
during that time, and she didn’t have another relationship.”
your hero and heroine unite after several years apart where he was a slut
during that time, and she didn’t have another relationship.”
●
“…forget to develop your characters along with your plot. Loveable,
well-rounded characters are what make a story stay with a reader long after the
book is finished.”
“…forget to develop your characters along with your plot. Loveable,
well-rounded characters are what make a story stay with a reader long after the
book is finished.”
●“…wait
until halfway through the book to begin describing your characters. On too many
occasions I have felt I was left to my own devices to envision the characters,
then –BAM– suddenly my Kate Beckinsale is supposedly a Gwyneth Paltrow. VERY
aggravating.”
until halfway through the book to begin describing your characters. On too many
occasions I have felt I was left to my own devices to envision the characters,
then –BAM– suddenly my Kate Beckinsale is supposedly a Gwyneth Paltrow. VERY
aggravating.”
Love/Sex Scenes: Dear Author, Please
Don’t…
Don’t…
●
“…forget to put a little variety in your love-making.”
“…forget to put a little variety in your love-making.”
●
“…tell the reader what a great lover the hero is, then give him only a short
paragraph or two to prove it. Speed sex is not sexy, spend some time on these
scenes and give it at least a few pages.”
“…tell the reader what a great lover the hero is, then give him only a short
paragraph or two to prove it. Speed sex is not sexy, spend some time on these
scenes and give it at least a few pages.”
● “…discuss
the amount of body hair your heroine has.”
the amount of body hair your heroine has.”
● “…have
a fight in the bedroom while they are naked in bed and then allow him to stomp
out and jump in the car…without any clothes on.
a fight in the bedroom while they are naked in bed and then allow him to stomp
out and jump in the car…without any clothes on.
● “…forget
to give your characters some sexual quirks. Not every character is going to
like it the same way.
to give your characters some sexual quirks. Not every character is going to
like it the same way.
●
“…muddle through the sex. Either dedicate yourself to more than just a sigh and
light touch, or let the scene fade away with dignity . . . Spice things up.
Characters are people, and every person in the world has a kink. Big or small,
discovered or un-, every person has something just a little out of the ordinary
that turns them on.”
“…muddle through the sex. Either dedicate yourself to more than just a sigh and
light touch, or let the scene fade away with dignity . . . Spice things up.
Characters are people, and every person in the world has a kink. Big or small,
discovered or un-, every person has something just a little out of the ordinary
that turns them on.”
●“…give
graphic descriptions of the hero’s and heroine’s genitals and please do
not use pages and pages of explicit sex, either in the character’s imaginations
or their reality, to cover up the fact that there is a paucity of plot! Boring,
boring!”
graphic descriptions of the hero’s and heroine’s genitals and please do
not use pages and pages of explicit sex, either in the character’s imaginations
or their reality, to cover up the fact that there is a paucity of plot! Boring,
boring!”
●
“…have the heroine lose her virginity, then go on to have sex 8 times the same
night in 6 different positions (Can you say ouch??)”
“…have the heroine lose her virginity, then go on to have sex 8 times the same
night in 6 different positions (Can you say ouch??)”
●
“…have the hero stop after 3 solid pages of foreplay, look deep in the
heroine’s eyes and ask “are you sure you want to do this?” Duh! If
she has been enthusiastically participating for said 3 solid pages, why would
the hero suddenly decide to double check just before hiding the you know what??
Talk about a mood killer.”
“…have the hero stop after 3 solid pages of foreplay, look deep in the
heroine’s eyes and ask “are you sure you want to do this?” Duh! If
she has been enthusiastically participating for said 3 solid pages, why would
the hero suddenly decide to double check just before hiding the you know what??
Talk about a mood killer.”
Plot: Dear Author, Please Don’t…
● “… forget
to include a plot. The days when I read romance novels for sex are pretty much
over. A storyline would be nice.”
to include a plot. The days when I read romance novels for sex are pretty much
over. A storyline would be nice.”
● “…make
me read the roller coaster ride of a plot you’ve put the hero through and then,
on the last page, in the last sentence, a shot rings out and I have to wait for
the sequel except it won’t come out until two years from now.”
me read the roller coaster ride of a plot you’ve put the hero through and then,
on the last page, in the last sentence, a shot rings out and I have to wait for
the sequel except it won’t come out until two years from now.”
● “…make
every hero a man whore. Sometimes less experienced guys are hot too.”
every hero a man whore. Sometimes less experienced guys are hot too.”
●
“…forgive too easily. No matter how much love is between two people, when one
makes a mistake, the other doesn’t just forget about it. There are always
consequences for stupidity.”
“…forgive too easily. No matter how much love is between two people, when one
makes a mistake, the other doesn’t just forget about it. There are always
consequences for stupidity.”
●“…have
your character set out to ruin someone’s reputation. Usually this is the hero
ruining the heroine in historicals, but recently reading a heroine who is
setting out to ruin a man’s reputation for cash and I find it extremely
unattractive plot device.”
your character set out to ruin someone’s reputation. Usually this is the hero
ruining the heroine in historicals, but recently reading a heroine who is
setting out to ruin a man’s reputation for cash and I find it extremely
unattractive plot device.”
●
“…have the entire book hinge on some stupid misunderstanding that could be
cleared up with two sentences. Please, let’s have some books with real
relationship issues!”
“…have the entire book hinge on some stupid misunderstanding that could be
cleared up with two sentences. Please, let’s have some books with real
relationship issues!”
●
“…have the hero and heroine bicker like children for most of the book.”
“…have the hero and heroine bicker like children for most of the book.”
Dialogue: Dear Author, Please Don’t…
● “…talk
slang, outside of the dialogue, in the narration.”
slang, outside of the dialogue, in the narration.”
● “…include
too much girl talk. I don’t have a clutch of gossiping girlfriends who dis men,
and reading about it is boring. I can’t enjoy the heroine if she’s acting like
a gossiping cat.”
too much girl talk. I don’t have a clutch of gossiping girlfriends who dis men,
and reading about it is boring. I can’t enjoy the heroine if she’s acting like
a gossiping cat.”
● “…sermonize
in your fiction. I don’t care if its vegetarianism, your favorite brand of
shoes, or social responsibility. Having your character lecture your readers is
annoying!”
in your fiction. I don’t care if its vegetarianism, your favorite brand of
shoes, or social responsibility. Having your character lecture your readers is
annoying!”
● “…have
the hero or heroine say those dreaded words, “We have to talk.” “
the hero or heroine say those dreaded words, “We have to talk.” “
Writing Craft and GMC: Dear Author,
Please Don’t…
Please Don’t…
● “…explain
things to me. I like to figure it out on my own.”
things to me. I like to figure it out on my own.”
●
“…use foreign words or phrases unless you know what you’re
talking about. A little research would be appreciated.”
“…use foreign words or phrases unless you know what you’re
talking about. A little research would be appreciated.”
●
“…sanitize awkward situations. Sometimes a little awkwardness is exactly what
the story–or the character–needs.”
“…sanitize awkward situations. Sometimes a little awkwardness is exactly what
the story–or the character–needs.”
●
…give the reader “too much stuff about…feelings. Do we really
need five (or seven, or ten) paragraphs about someone’s emotions? . . . I mean,
I know it’s a romance, and the conflict is important, but to have the same song
play out every third or fourth page… it gets old.”
…give the reader “too much stuff about…feelings. Do we really
need five (or seven, or ten) paragraphs about someone’s emotions? . . . I mean,
I know it’s a romance, and the conflict is important, but to have the same song
play out every third or fourth page… it gets old.”
●
…give the reader a reason to say, “Why do I hear the director in the background
crying “Reach deep into yourself! What’s…your…MOTIVATION???”
…give the reader a reason to say, “Why do I hear the director in the background
crying “Reach deep into yourself! What’s…your…MOTIVATION???”
●
“…don’t resolve the conflict in a few sentences just because someone cried or
said, “I Love You.”
“…don’t resolve the conflict in a few sentences just because someone cried or
said, “I Love You.”
Technical Craft: Dear Author, please
don’t…
don’t…
●
“…forget to proofread carefully.
“…forget to proofread carefully.
●
“…send a manuscript to the publisher without having at least five people–other
than yourself–read it. Misspellings and plot holes are the most annoying
mistakes, and the easiest to fix.
“…send a manuscript to the publisher without having at least five people–other
than yourself–read it. Misspellings and plot holes are the most annoying
mistakes, and the easiest to fix.
● “…allow
Microsoft Word to suggest your writing style. Contractions are important. I
downloaded a book today and couldn’t get past the first five pages because the
writer never used them.
Microsoft Word to suggest your writing style. Contractions are important. I
downloaded a book today and couldn’t get past the first five pages because the
writer never used them.
●
“…write without a dictionary, thesaurus, and an atlas at your side.
“…write without a dictionary, thesaurus, and an atlas at your side.
●
“…forget to let the reader know how much time is passing. Was it a day, a week,
an hour? Help me keep up; I can’t read your mind.
“…forget to let the reader know how much time is passing. Was it a day, a week,
an hour? Help me keep up; I can’t read your mind.
● “…give
detailed descriptions of how to get somewhere on a freeway across town
including the turn right and left thing.”
detailed descriptions of how to get somewhere on a freeway across town
including the turn right and left thing.”
●
“…write the book in first person.”
“…write the book in first person.”
● “…jump
POV’s to the hero’s baby momma’s cousin.”
POV’s to the hero’s baby momma’s cousin.”
● “…switch
tenses throughout your whole story.”
tenses throughout your whole story.”
I love these comments, Ruth. Thanks for sharing 🙂
@Jenny Schwartz
I enjoyed it too. Thanks for leaving a comment.
I agree with most of these comments. I, however, do enjoy books written in 1st person.
Me,too. I was nodding my head up until it said not to write the book in first person. I enjoy romance both in the third and first person. Not sure why that's even mentioned…